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Singing to me a symphony of death
The strain in my body with every last breath
Draining my life a soul torn apart
Needing only time with this slow beating heart

The tune of my soul is dying within
This aging carcass is wearing so thin
Notes of life will soon lose their tune
As I'm sitting here so empty in this prison, my room

This song is now reaching the end of it's time
Nothing to leave for you but this poorly writ rhyme
But hope goes out for the one who does care
Because in your heart my music is there...
Love you.

Please feel free to correct my grammar by note on any of my written works.
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Richtofensmyhusband Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014
This is just lovely!
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:iconmelanie-j-howle:
Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much and also for the fav :D
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KarahRobinson-Art Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is beautiful :wow: :love: 
Could be sang beautifully too! 
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:iconmelanie-j-howle:
Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you and for the fav :blackrose:
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Shades-Of-Lethe Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Deeply amazing! :heart: 
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:iconmelanie-j-howle:
Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much :heart:
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anthonycrowley Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Professional Writer
Fantastic artwork :) I like & admire them all,It's a comfort like a second skin of strength ,when I gaze at these creative images of deep,beautiful visionary thoughts.... AC x
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:iconmelanie-j-howle:
Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much for your kind words :iconblackheartplz:
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:iconracerman56:
racerman56 Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Beautifully written....
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:iconmelanie-j-howle:
Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much :hug:
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:iconmegan7:
megan7 Featured By Owner May 23, 2013
Lovely :love:
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:iconmelanie-j-howle:
Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much :huggle:
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:iconmegan7:
megan7 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
Most welcome dear :heart:
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:iconcaddman:
caddman Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Professional General Artist
...Absolutely Amazing job...:clap:
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:iconmelanie-j-howle:
Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much :hug:
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:iconcaddman:
caddman Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Professional General Artist
...my pleasure dear friend..:rose:
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rsiphotography Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Professional General Artist
awesome Mel....flows and weaves
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:iconmelanie-j-howle:
Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much :D
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:iconpjenz:
pjenz Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
beautiful :heart:
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:iconmelanie-j-howle:
Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much :hug:
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:iconpjenz:
pjenz Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
so very welcome :heart:
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duskrogue Featured By Owner May 22, 2013
very nice, has an ease of flow and feeling. :winner:
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:iconmelanie-j-howle:
Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much :D
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sakunokishimori Featured By Owner May 3, 2013
This is a very well-written piece. I love the rhyming and the message. The tone of death.. It's a nice concept.
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:iconmelanie-j-howle:
Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you.
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sakunokishimori Featured By Owner May 12, 2013
You're welcome.
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demonrobber Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013
Love can be our salvation. We think of death and we feel empty inside but a caring soul with a warm heart can save us. The symphony of death turns into a sweet love song. This was really good with an uplifting ending.
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Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :)
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cosmosalone200 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013
love
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:iconmelanie-j-howle:
Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:love:
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DreamingMind-set Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely poem.:clap:
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Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :D
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DreamingMind-set Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem.:hooray:
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:iconcibian:
Cibian Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very beautiful =3
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Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you again sweets and for the favs :huggle:
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:iconcibian:
Cibian Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your welcome and np =3 They are awesome.
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Daggerbeak Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
Very nice, very moving. :)
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:iconmelanie-j-howle:
Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :D
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Daggerbeak Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
Your welcome! :)
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wanbliceya Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
This is tremendous, I feel it and I love you. :)
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Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you hun :huggle:
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vampirekingdom Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013   Digital Artist
Cool!
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Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you sweet friend :heart:
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vampirekingdom Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013   Digital Artist
You're very welcome :heart:
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angeluchiha7 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Student Artist
nice song vary touching :)
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Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :)
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angeluchiha7 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Student Artist
yw
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AngeliaStocks Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
:iconbwavoplz:
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Melanie-J-Howle Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:bow: :D
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