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The real world................
The real world don't care if your broke
The real world don't care if you choke
The real world will leave you to die
The real world will not tell you why
The real world is only a game
The real world wants to hurt and to maim
The real world will keep you in denial
The real world will lie with a smile
The real world has nobody's back
The real world is not real thats a fact.
The real world don't care if your broke
The real world don't care if you choke
The real world will leave you to die
The real world will not tell you why
The real world is only a game
The real world wants to hurt and to maim
The real world will keep you in denial
The real world will lie with a smile
The real world has nobody's back
The real world is not real thats a fact.
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The only part of this I didn't care for was the punchline at the end. Even though I dig the simile, there's something about it rhyming too that makes me feel like it was injected at the end to sound cool. Not that you're a poser!!! For instance, I did the same thing in a poem I just wrote and I had to step back and admit to myself that I was only trying to show off. But what can I say? I can't read your mind, girl! That's just the impression I got.
Any rate, I like the vision of this piece and I couldn't agree more with the message. Once again, you go straight to the point without any bullshit filler. It's honest and heartfelt and who doesn't feel this way from time to time.
Actually, it's just a truism. The world will fucking bury you if you let it. *_*